在雅思写作的过程中,转折链接、因果链接、递进链接、举例等都少不了衔接词的使用,不少同学雅思写作错失高分的原因之一,就是因为句子和段落之间衔接不当。下面就来看看雅思写作衔接词使用常见问题。
1、衔接词误用导致的语法错误
a. The sense of belonging to a team or a working community also contributes to job satisfaction. Because colleagues help each other to enjoy their working lives.
错误点:because是连词,不可单独成句。
正确的句子:The sense of belonging to a team or a working community also contributes to job satisfaction, because colleagues help each other to enjoy their working lives. (选自剑7Test3Task2书后范文)
b. Governments ought to restrict advertisements for harmful products. Such as alcohol and tobacco, however, they do not have the power to control other forms of advertising.
错误点:such as 后加同位语,不可单独成句;however是副词,不可连接两个句子。
正确的句子:Governments ought to restrict advertisements for harmful products, such as alcohol and tobacco. However, they do not have the power to control other forms of advertising.(例句选自考官范文)
2、衔接词误用导致的逻辑错误
Some people support that education should help students become useful to the society, because students will have more knowledge after being educated.
错误点:学生受教育,变得有学问这个点和教育应该培养学生贡献社会没有明确因果逻辑关系,使用because这个明显因果逻辑词,前后句逻辑混乱。
正确的句子:Education should make students useful members of society because education is financially supported by the government and students who make use of the resource should repay the society.
句子间的逻辑:因为政府资助了教育,所以教育应该培养对社会有用的人,回馈社会。逻辑通。
3、“走极端型”的衔接问题
First of all, the late parenthood is because of the rising cost of living. As we all know, young people are often paid less in the working world. Therefore, they are less likely to save enough money to guarantee a high standard of living. Furthermore, since most young people are well-educated, they are fully aware of the importance of living environment to a child’s growth. Besides, gender equality allows a large number of women to pursue their career ambitions. However, if they have children early, they have to pay more attention to their family commitment. As a result, they may miss out opportunities to improve their job skills and get promoted.
问题表现:连接词过度使用,这个段落每一个句子都用了一个连接词,且不是每个连接都足够准确,如furthermore一般多用于补充新观点。这种写法就很容易被考官判定为“mechanical writing”,后果是Coherence and Cohesion (连贯与衔接)这一部分的得分不超过6分。
上段可调整如下:
The late parenthood among young adults is perhaps attributed to the rising cost of living. Young people are often paid less in the working world, sothey are less likely to save enough money to guarantee a high standard of living if they need to raise a child. Since most young people are well-educated, they are fully aware of the importance of living environment to a child’s growth. This is why they are unwilling to have children until they are well-prepared. Another reason for this trend is the gender equality allows a large number of women to pursue their career ambitions. If they have children early, they have to pay more attention to their family commitment and may miss out opportunities to improve their job skills and get promoted.
4、常用的衔接方法
①连接词 (so, since, another reason)
②代词(they; this; this trend)
③替换&重复 (young people; have children early/late的替换和重复)
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